In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations
After the arrival of new technology, the average life expectancy has improved especially in the developed countries. Although it would adversely affect both individuals as well as society, it would dealing with more efficient way.
The first problem is that the elder people who always become an extra burden to some family. This is because, nowadays, people live in a competitive world where the children forced to work more hours in order to their family affairs. Sometimes, it creates to break down the interpersonal relationship between parents and children in a certain family due to the excessive workload at work place. Also, the aged people become a burden to society. This means that government, nowadays, spending a greater amount of fund on old age welfare society such as pension, insurance and incentives in many nation, rather than other important developments like roads, hospitals, education, and so on. Therefore, it will adversely affect the financial status of a country.
However, there are some practical ways to address this major issue in some effective way. First, the government should cut short the amount of pension or other incentives and instead to provide them free health care support. Unless the country loss the large amount of order, it will certainly strike the growth and development of a nation. Also, the government can impose strict law and order and this could be alleviated overpopulation considerably. Thus, the authority needs to pay only less amount to the people, if the population is less. For example, Vatican City is one of the lowest population than other country and therefore the government can pay attention to the public.
In conclusion, rising the number of elder people is an existing problem especially most of the developed country and this is affecting both individuals and the community in a significant way. If the family and the government takes the right measure at the right time, it could be well controlled without any harm.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...n a competitive world where the children forced to work more hours in order to th...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun nation seems to be countable; consider using: 'many nations'.
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Message: Consider replacing "in a significant way" with adverb for "significant"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ting both individuals and the community in a significant way. If the family and the government takes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15740740741 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77738508884 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2143765162 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.4375 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221340675883 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608330500558 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369797199285 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120479911682 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0108776723321 0.056905535591 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.