Currently the way how we make decisions while purchasing goods is hardly dependent on which information we take into account. A great deal of people hold the belief that advertisements negatively effect the ability of individuals to purchase products wisely. I partially agree that ads could influence us in a bad way, however I believe that if the governments controlled toughly advertisement campaigns we would receive only usefull information from advertisements.
First of all, the main motivation for sellers of goods is making profit, therefore they are interested in higher revenue instead of real value for clients. Over the last century advertisements has changed dramatically, they became much more concise and usually provide no iformation about real features of the product advertised. For example, recently BMW company has promoted its' new car with almost empty banners around the world, the only things which were printed on them were the wheel with BMW logo and slogan that everyone has to buy it. I belive that such a promotion provide no value for prospective buyers and should be banned.
Nevertheless, advertisements could help buyers to find out information about product they consider to buy, especialy if promotion companies were well supervised. The main problem is connected with the fact that some companies are cheating on customers by providing untruth information or emphasising only on positive features of the good. For instance, farmaceutical companies show in advertisements information about positive effects of treatments and do not disclose possible side effects and those type of advertisements is banned in developed countries.
In conclusion, even though we are negatively influenced by some advertisements, proper governments' controll could change the way how products are advertised. Moreover we could became wise consumers and consume products with maximal effectiveness.
- As children become adults, their social behavior changes in some ways.What are the main differences between young children’s social behavior and that of adults. To what extend are the changes that took place good? 78
- Science tells us about the activities which are good for our health and others which are bad. Millions of people all over the world knows this and still do unhealthy activities. Why do you think this is and what can be done to change it? 61
- The best way to reduce youth crimes is to teach their parents parental skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 78
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. 61
- The average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003 are shown in the bar chart below.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 306, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a bad way" with adverb for "bad"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ially agree that ads could influence us in a bad way, however I believe that if the governme...
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Line 3, column 91, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider buying'.
Suggestion: consider buying
...find out information about product they consider to buy, especialy if promotion companies were ...
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Line 4, column 158, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ge the way how products are advertised. Moreover we could became wise consumers and cons...
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Line 4, column 176, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'become'
Suggestion: become
...ducts are advertised. Moreover we could became wise consumers and consume products wit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58419243986 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17181199807 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621993127148 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5588605341 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.416666667 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0833333333 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125712719719 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468308501484 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391893583148 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.079278443837 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389102209122 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.