Due to effects of globalisation, the cultures of some countries are influenced by others. Some people think this is a natural process. Others think this is a threat to cultural identity. What is your opinion about this?
The expansion of globalization has swept away the boundaries among different nations all over the world due to the rapid development of technology, amelioration of urbanization and improvement in lifestyle and living standards of inhabitants. In this regards, some people believe that globalization has impaired the culture, tradition and customs of a nation naturally, while others argue that the cultural values of underdeveloping countries are dominated by overseas culture.
In my opinion, it is a natural process because the advancement of technology has altered the living style of human beings throughout the globe. In addition, their dependency on new products have changed their way of life such as the use of television has subsided the public gathering at night and the use of mobile has isolated us from our real friends whom we meet at the cafe to discuss or share our ideas regarding the miseries of this capitalist society.
As human alters his habit according to his surrounding, thereby he can assimilate the variable nature of society. For instance, prior to the advent of electricity people used to sleep early in the night, while currently most of the people asleep lately in the midnight. Furthermore, in the agrarian society, people wake up early in the morning to cultivate their land usually in the day, whereas people work day and night in industrial society.
The globalization has also severely impaired our traditional wearing habits. For example, in Pakistan, the western outlets are the most famous among the youngster, while their traditional clothing only reported occasionally on festivals and other rituals. For instance, in my province (Sindh), the use of traditional dresses such as Shalwar and Khamis (Paint and Shirt), Ajrak (shawl) and Sindhi Topi (hat) are declining drastically due to the intervention of western and Arb culture. Additionally, the lingual, verbal and cognitive skill of Pakistani people are severely destructed by Arab and western culture. As English is considered as a global language and spoken all over the world. Thereby, nowadays Sindhi people are less familiar with their mother tongue because their education system has been engulfed by the English language. As a consequence, there are very few people who are familiar with Sindhi poetry of Shah Abdul Latif Bhittai and Sachal Sarmast. Even no one among the young generation has studied the Shah Jo Risalo completely.
Modernization has escalated the globalisation and it had impaired Sindhi hospitality severely. For instance, previously Sindhi were famous for their hospitality as they allow guest for weeks at their home and fulfils his whole needs of that time, while now people are living in very congested homes, even they can't let their blood relative stay for a night.
In conclusion, in my opinion, the globalization is not good for a society until it does not dwindle the cultural and traditional values of the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, regarding, so, whereas, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2488.0 1615.20841683 154% => OK
No of words: 471.0 315.596192385 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28237791932 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90057910038 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 176.041082164 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549893842887 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 797.4 506.74238477 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.8746754925 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.222222222 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1666666667 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27777777778 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117386591358 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0345213156951 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477898668956 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.065796345197 0.151304729494 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046463395554 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 78.4519038076 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 9.78957915832 169% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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