Education for young people is important in many countries. However, the others think government should spend more money for education in adult population who can not read and write.To what extent do you agree or disagree? -2

Essay topics:

Education for young people is important in many countries. However, the others think government should spend more money for education in adult population who can not read and write.
To what extent do you agree or disagree? -2

It is clear that providing a good educational background for children is really vital at the early age. Nevertheless, some believe that the authorities’ budget need to be used more for the aldults do not have the abilities of reading and writing skills.

There is an argument in favor of the idea that the governments should invest more for illiterate adults. This is because when the literacy rates in the mature people increase significantly, it means that those who used to be unaware of writing and reading, they have been able to have the opportunities to land a job to earn a living, including becoming blue-collar workers in public services as bus drivers, cleaners. As a result of this, they might stable their lives, and this also allows the authorities reducing crime rates as well as guaranteeing the safety of society. Therefore, it is justifiable for supporters of the view that more money should be used for illiterate people.

However, I am of the opinion that the government funding must be spent more on children due to the main benefit of economic perspective. This can be explained by the fact that with the intensive globalization around the world, all nations, these days, need to be reliant on the knowledge-based economy to exist and develop sustainably, so younger generation as children should be the first priority for this. Specifically, more financial aids have to be allocated for teaching and learning tools or providing scholarships for poor pupils having a knack for mathematics and foreign languages from the primary level. For this convincing reason, it is better for a country if children get more from the authorities.

In conclusion, while it is necessary to support for illiterate adults from the state’s funds, I hold with the view that more money must be invested for children.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06930693069 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01308383621 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580858085809 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.1635126942 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.636363636 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5454545455 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3636363636 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238675408339 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105795313887 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532839899124 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15636818394 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0152098566556 0.056905535591 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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