Essay topics: consumers are faced with increasing number of advertisments from conpeting companies. to what extent do you think are consumers influenced bay advertisments? what can be done to protect
In the wake of social development, adverts, especially the online ones, have become effective and efficient method tool to promote the consumerism. This essay, however, believes that the government is better to release necessary policies to protect the citizens from these. In my opinion, advertisements affect consumers both positively and negatively.
It is irrefutable that advertisements manifest in various ways such as radio, Internet, television, to many but a few. Therefore, it enhances opportunity for people in the outskirt area to approach range of products. Furthermore, adverts would explode products with their qualified features, which may probably influence decision-making in consuming habit. To illustrate, Electrolux with its decently qualified washing machine has been a trustworthy brand-name for buyers worldwide thank to wide coverage of advertisement industry. The Electrolux washing machine is profoundly outstanding; therefore, it started gaining faith from customer it the first trial use. That is to say, introducing product through advertisement is a win-win situation both to consumers and manufacturers.
Despite its plus, adverts still have detrimental effect. Firstly, it confuses housewives since there are some cases where the effects and functions of products are being exaggerated. Consequently, it leads to mistrust from both direct and indirect customer. Secondly, children will always be the prevalent target while laughing advertisements. As the matter of course, they are easily to convince and monitor rather than caregivers. Last but not least, the misleading information triggers the confusion in exploiting and consuming products. Let take formula milk as a particular example. The consumerism has been affected by the illusion of formula milk, thus, they unavoidably deny function of breastfeeding. Generally, the degree of influenced by adverts differs from person to person.
as a result , if the government want to protect their citizens , they have strictly censorship and supervision on the adverts . the origin and the quality of the products , which are advertised should be fully checked before getting to the customers . moreover , they should control the broadcasting time of adverts such as the junk food so that it could only appear at night when all of the youngsters are not awake. hence , this negative eating habits could be deleted.
in conclusion , people would be affected by both advantagous and disadvantegous results from adverts so the governments should have the solution to vanish the detrimental ones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, of course, such as, as a result, in my opinion, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 383.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71540469974 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17896331925 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616187989556 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4816550217 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1739130435 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.652173913 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.26086956522 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168574702868 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431668589208 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404240658075 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0871510416127 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037029600257 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.6 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.04 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 78.4519038076 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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