Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
It is true that some kinds of sport such as skydiving and skiing can pose a threat to people’s health; so, some people hold a belief that these sports should be prohibited. Personally, I strongly disagree with this statement due to some following reasons.
Firstly, people are entitled to do whatever they want in a civilized society as long as they do not break the laws of their countries. In fact, citizens would have complete freedom to choose and take part in any sport they are interested in on a daily basis regardless of its danger and level of difficulty. It is ideal for the government to encourage the general public to get involved in sports and exercise to keep fit and stay healthy. As a result, this would lead to an increase in the number of citizens who suffer from health issues such as diabetes and obesity.
Secondly, some people are more likely to regard joining these extreme sports as one of the most effective ways to release all pressure and stresses after a long day at school or workplace. For instance, my little brother who has taken up and participated in skydiving for 3 years confessed he would feel satisfied after joining any session with his peers because free falling from such an enormous altitude allows him to put all problems he encountered in life aside and enjoy his moments only.
Lastly, some people believe that taking part in these dangerous sports would act as the way of challenging and inspiring themselves before pursuing next goals in both their private and professional lives, which could help them get a sense of fulfillment.
In conclusion, it seems to me that there are no convincing reasons to ban these dangerous sports. Instead, the government should launch some nationwide campaigns to raise public awareness of some unexpected circumstances possibly occurring when joining these types of sports.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 357, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...eal for the government to encourage the general public to get involved in sports and exercise ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95238095238 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68301113543 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622222222222 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.6865480449 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.818181818 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6363636364 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9090909091 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160272249481 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590681414894 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366519500516 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837678602536 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550700637942 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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