Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Some people believe that some sporty activities such as sky diving and skiing are not safe for people playing these sports, so these sports should be banned. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the agrument that is danger because these sports can easily harm humans but these ones should be kept allowing by governments.
To begin with, sports as sky diving and skiing are necessary for people who are interested in some adventure activities. Firstly, some people have their enjoyable things which are adventure events or dangerous games want to experience themselves. Hence, it has invented some difficult games which needs their brave. Taking sky diving is an example. Nowadays, in some countries entire the world, especially Rusia, Rusian government takes place a season when people have chance to compete with others, be a champion, and earn the respect from others.
Furthermore, it is a fact that some people hurts because of playing these games, it is, hence, harmful to players’ physical health, especially some beginners’ due to their accidents. If people want some adventure events and some extreme sports to be allow in some countries where the national leaders are tough, they should decrease the harmful elements on people who join in these activities. For example, some pro-players should share their experience and teach others, which can help beginners have a good knowledge before starting these activities. Moreover, players should practice beforehand. They should have a hard time practicing their knowledge before enjoying some tough activities and some sporty dangers.
To sum up, Some games such as sky diving and skiing are dangerous for players. However, people can decrease the risks of these games by some different methods. Hence, these sports should not be banned entire the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
...eve that some sporty activities such as sky diving and skiing are not safe for people play...
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Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'these' instead.
Suggestion: these
...these sports can easily harm humans but these ones should be kept allowing by governments....
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Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
... governments. To begin with, sports as sky diving and skiing are necessary for people who...
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Line 2, column 323, Rule ID: SKY_DIVING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
...t games which needs their brave. Taking sky diving is an example. Nowadays, in some countr...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'good knowledge'.
Suggestion: good knowledge
...h others, which can help beginners have a good knowledge before starting these activities. Moreo...
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Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
...angers. To sum up, Some games such as sky diving and skiing are dangerous for players. H...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, for example, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27586206897 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50937836644 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524137931034 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7783709574 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162458081886 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769039838425 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586865713688 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132426989914 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406684255113 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.