Failure is proof that the desire wasn't strong enough
To what extent do you agree with this statement?
To a certain extent I agree that many people fail to do something because their hope is not stronger enough. However, I also think that the failure can be caused by external factors.
On the one hand, almost people cannot achieve something because they do not really desire it. Therefore, they have not tried their best yet as well as they have not spent enough time to do this. For example, if a student wish to get a scholarship, he will make a plan, then divide into separated steps. Depending on it, he will study and work day by day to upgrade himself to obtain the scholarship. Moreover, if the desire is not big enough, which cannot create incentive to motivate a person to follow his plan. In the first time, they are still patient and hard enough to do their work, but they will be lazier and ignored after a long time. Simply because, they lost their motivation. That is the main reason to lead a failure.
On the other hand, failure or success will be affected by other factors. For example, a student is really into studying abroad and he has a perfect plan but his parents do not want to him to be away from home. Or a worker wish that he will promote in the next year and he works hard to achieve it. However, he is suddenly ill, which compulsory him to quit his job. As a result, many people have to accept the failure because of some things they cannot control although they have a great desire.
For the aforementioned reasons, I believe that the main reason why many people fail to do something is the desire being not strong enough. However, the failure can be caused by something none can anticipate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, really, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1337.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48657718121 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33662130183 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510067114094 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.4323457403 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.6470588235 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5294117647 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11764705882 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109623529136 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0368214572225 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369077947315 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0839048365626 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326775669863 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 13.0946893788 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 12.4159519038 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.58950901804 80% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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