In contemporary times in many countries, people have concerned about increase the crime rate, therefore the authorities are raising the cost for the protection of the people. Some believe that to keep them safe and for their security, the government should give more funds to the defense sector without being given to the social section. I partly agree with this statement. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my partial agreement.
On the one hand, national security is the topmost priority in the case of every nation because depending on it, the country's economy also relies on it. For this reason, the investment of money in this department should be increased by the government, as for security purposes CCTV cameras should be placed on the road which will help to downgrade the crime rate. For example, after setting up the cameras on the road the crime incident in Mumbai has decreased a lot. Now it is easier to find out the criminals by using these cameras. Moreover, more people should be employed in the police or in the security task force, and the patrolling should be increased. Therefore, the governing bodies should have utilized more money in this division to ensure the safety of people.
On the other hand, the defense system can not cure criminal activities, hence we have to find out the root of the crime. According to the crime analyst, most of the crime happens due to the lack of employment, so the government should increase job opportunities which have already been proved very useful in many countries. For instance, in 2019, the Bangladesh government made almost 2 million vacancies for unemployed people. As a result, in the next two years crime activities decreased significantly.
In conclusion, without having a strong defense system safety can not be ensured. To sum up all the points above, I can say that the government should spend money equally in these two sectors.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the government, as for security purposes CCTV cameras should be placed on the roa...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9751552795 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67290110053 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565217391304 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7826413158 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.125 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208475737973 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616911183418 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537016149289 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131435507758 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344871621788 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the government, as for security purposes CCTV cameras should be placed on the roa...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9751552795 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67290110053 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565217391304 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7826413158 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.125 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208475737973 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616911183418 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537016149289 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131435507758 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344871621788 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.