Government investment in the arts such as music and theatre is a waste of money Governments must invest this money in public services instead To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Essay topics:

Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Currently, most governments spend a large part of their budget not only on public services, but also the arts. although it is necessary to channel a proportion of government money toward this sector,
most should be spent on public services.

it is important that the government spends a significant amount of its budget on public services because these are our hospitals, roads and schools, and they determine quality of life. Taking the UK as an example, the government has recently reduced public spending on health and education, resulting in increased waiting lists for hospital treatments and fewer teachers, both of which will have further adverse effects in the future. this demonstrates the importance of ensuring that a large proportion of government money is spent on public services as it is the only way to maintain standards and accessibility for everyone.

However,thisdoesnotmeanthattheartsshouldbecompletelyneglected. Firstly,itisdifficultfor many arts institutions to generate much profit because people are not prepared to pay high entrance fees for places such as art galleries or theatres, so without some help from the government, such
placesmayhavetoclose. Also,theartshaveanimportantimpactonourqualityoflife,withmany people getting great pleasure in going to see music and theatre performances. Not only this, the performing arts and literary arts such as dance and books help to keep our culture and history alive for future generations.

To conclude, although the majority of government spending should be directed towards public services, spending money on the arts is not a waste and should continue. A balance is required to ensure public services are maintained whilst the arts remain available to all.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.79766536965 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 5.83193070664 2.80592935109 208% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591439688716 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.834004546 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.0 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271713222269 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108879766028 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521434649141 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128554802051 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593338954568 0.056905535591 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.0946893788 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.66 12.4159519038 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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