The government should be responsible for providing retirees with financial support and care. While many people think that citizens should save money to take care of themselves when they are old. Discuss both views and give your opinion
It is thought that the government should be responsible to help retirees with financial support and care, other people believe that individuals should save their own revenue to take care of themselves when they are old. From my point of view, in some situation i mostly agree with the first notion because of its benefits and pratical for the resident life. The following essay will analyse this statement in detail.
first of all, in the industrialized world and with the appearence of modern technology that the requirement of people have increase gradually, so retirees's financial support and care is greatly sugnificant for the society. Not only does this phenomenon is the appropriate present for the contribution of older generation during their young period, but also the motivation and inspiration can be provided for the adolesence which improve their mentality life and cognotive systerm. Furthermore, the health and immune systerm of individuals will be advanced dramatically, reducing the propotion of death rate in their country. To illustrate, there was a vurvey by Rechart Lee, the famous interview and professor, which is expert about the success of european countries where their government have responsible for providing retirees with financial support and care. The statistic demonstrate that nearly every nation has got plenty of achievement in their improvement.
However, we can not negate the drawback of this problem when compare with the second notion. If the people depend too much on retirees's financial support, they will lose their independent abilities which have numerous weakness affection for their economic background. Moreover, many government take advantage from this investment for their own profits, various harmful influence will be led by this action to the young generation.
To conclude, though my agrument from the essay, i totally agree the the first statement, but it still have some negative aspects for the society. The state need to have clear plans to improve their citizens for the nation's development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.3376753507 264% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40498442368 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82076174975 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585669781931 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2538024531 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.461538462 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6923076923 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305421536704 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10292355414 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1320077962 0.0667982634062 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192142130391 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128592022711 0.056905535591 226% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.