Government should introduce healthcare which prevents illness rather than cures it How far go you agree with statement

Essay topics:

Government should introduce healthcare which prevents illness rather than cures it. How far go you agree with statement.

It is undeniable that healthcare is very important but it is can be very expensive. Many people think that government should try to prevent illness by different ways and making sure everyone in their country has a healthy lifestyle. In my opinion, I agree that preventing illness is better than curing it.
On the one hand, the cost of medical treatment can be high so government have to think of ways to encourage people to be healthier. If people are healthy, they will not need medical care so often. Many diseases can be prevented such as obesity, back pain if people have healthy diets, take exercise and give up unhealthy habits such as smoking or eating more junk food. If people can not work or care their family or eve themselves due to illness, this will cost government and taxpayers a lot of money. So, I think that governments should spend money on producing information leaflets or advertising on the television which encourage people to follow healthy lifestyles such as eating plenty of fruit and vegetables, taking regular exercise and giving up smoking. In addition, governments should also reduce environment pollution because this can cause illness and health problems.
On the other hand, having a healthy lifestyle cannot prevent all health problems. Cancer is a disease which are a result of livingin the modern world and which cannot be prevented by a healthy lifestyle. Besides, accidents from work or on the road will also cause injuries which need medical treatment. If governments focus mainly on prevention, there may be less money for urgent healthcare and many people could suffer.
In conclusion, I believe that governments should prodice a balance of prevention and medical treatment, but their main focus should be on prevention rather than cure.

Votes
Average: 8.7 (22 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 115, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...ention and medical treatment, but their main focus should be on prevention rather than cur...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, so, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1489.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04745762712 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71329623218 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538983050847 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1484631354 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.357142857 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0714285714 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223842572916 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089403427478 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896923331654 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181337948647 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0822317286799 0.056905535591 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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