The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The health care system is experiencing a tension in a way to face with the health matters involved due to the amount of obesity people which is rise dramatically. Some community argue that introduce more physical knowledge lessons in the school subject is the great way to face with this matter. I personally agree that people should start concern about their health sooner, especially for the age of teenagers and young adults who spend most of their times in school.
First and foremost, the age of teenagers and young adults are the stage when somebody is looking for their own identity. Moreover, student spend most of their times in school at these stage of ages. Therefore, school should be a good example by supporting and sharing more physical educations in the subject. In order to this, student could understand which one is better for their life and more concern about their health.
Subsequently, people experience puberty in the stage of teenagers. Some researchers argue that people who is in the phase of puberty should practice a healthy diet in order to avoid obesity and other serious health problems such as cardiovascular disorder and diabetes. Hence, school must take a part in sharing knowledge about healthy diet and the positive impact of it to the body.
In conclusion, I agree that the school should take part to deteriorate the amount of obesity people. This could be done by adding more physical knowledge lessons in the subjects. As a result, student would understand the important of health and could be more concern of it.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1301.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96564885496 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59573695862 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 176.041082164 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477099236641 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 398.7 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4255215978 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.076923077 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46153846154 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227893974833 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840441484688 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779887806128 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141768529778 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0860996867018 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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