Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are a lot of small, local shops that could not compete since the supermarket has grow and expand significantly in some countries. This make many people realize that local communities could go out due to the close down of local shops. I personally disagree with that thought and support the expansion of the supermarkets.
First of all, the local shops in some countries, especially in emerging countries, they could not produce commodity needs completely. They are still lack of resources and equipment to fulfill their production activities. For instance, in Indonesia, there are many housewives and restaurants that experience difficulties in finding hydroponic vegetables in local markets. Most of them tend to buy hydroponic products in the supermarkets or changing their alternative into organic products. This is an evidence that there is still a problem with our living and this could be improved with the establishment of supermarkets.
Subsequently, the growth of supermarkets could reduce the rate of unemployment. If there is a new supermarket, there will be a new job as well. Local citizens could work in the supermarket therefore there would be a decrease in unemployment rate. This could also improve each nation's economy so they could compete with other countries. As the economic of each country increases, the society could experience the rise of their Gross Domestic Product (GDP) as well.
To sum up, the advancement of new supermarket will not give any burdens to local citizens. I strongly believe the growth and expansion of supermarkets could give many positive impacts to each countries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'grown'.
Suggestion: grown
...d not compete since the supermarket has grow and expand significantly in some countr...
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Line 5, column 277, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ment rate. This could also improve each nations economy so they could compete with othe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, still, therefore, well, for instance, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1368.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3023255814 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0684164281 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542635658915 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.915963985 49.4020404114 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.2 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46666666667 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217298104474 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795580189843 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722672923092 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15884169588 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755125063329 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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