Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities

Essay topics:

Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities

The increase in number of supermarkets probably benefit them but is gradually effecting the business of small and local one's to survive in the market.If the same continues then there might be near risk to the local communities.

Firstly,Over the past years the super markets are expanding the stores rapidly and almost influencing most of the people to visit the stores by impressing with offers and less charges when purchased than the local business.They are getting more profits with which they are developing more and people also need to think they are just fooling us by putting a tag of sale and free everywhere.For example,there was an advertisement in a paper such as sugar buy one get one free and detergents free.When you got to the store they mention that if the total bill is more than 2000 rupees then the offer is applicable but the same was not mentioned in the paper.Once they visit store they would not leave them until they buy.These are the business tactics which they use to meddle with people.

Secondly,the small-scale business who are running business for their living are hugely damaged as people don't buy in their stores where the products don't have any offers but people need to understand that their business is genuine with no tactics used because the products in the supermarkets half of it are fake one.For example there was a feed in the newspaper stating that the products available on stores are the made by them using lower quality.The higher people are educated the more foolish people are becoming.The local business are day by day decreasing in fact closing most of their business due to incapable losses.

Finally,People need to understand the effects of purchasing in the supermarkets as they strive for commercial profits and instead purchase from the local commodities and save their business and life.

In the conclusion,would agree that to the point that closing of business will affect the local communities and the well-being so try people need to increase the income of small business by consuming their goods rather than rushing to the supermarkets which indeed booming in the society.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0308988764 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77674045003 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505617977528 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 71.0 20.2975951904 350% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 236.35769503 49.4020404114 478% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 358.2 106.682146367 336% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 71.2 20.7667163134 343% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 20.6 7.06120827912 292% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242223636243 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164398383442 0.084324248473 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545546579659 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164398383442 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545546579659 0.056905535591 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 37.9 13.0946893788 289% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -0.59 50.2224549098 -1% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.0 11.3001002004 274% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.08 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.48 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 9.78957915832 281% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.4 10.1190380762 300% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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