Human society has made great technological progress in the last hundred years. Some people think this also has negative effects on our life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is clear that improvements in technology have changed the ways people live their lives and complete work. Although technology makes our life more convenient and comfortable, I would argue that it also brings some problems such as health issues.
Many people who rely heavily on high-tech devices may form a sedentary lifestyle, and their health will suffer. Those people spend more than 8 hours sitting in front of the computer and just use communication tools to chat with others, these behaviours can increase the risk of suffering health problems. For instance, office workers who just use their computers to communicate with their clients every day and even order takeaway may be subject to heart disease. These people are too busy with their work and they even do not have time to go to the canteen to have lunch. As a consequence, although computers and internet can be used to give them a hand with living more easily, this way of life can have an adverse on their health.
Another problem that technology brings to us is that it may lead to a rising of the unemployment rate. Many manufacturing industries nowadays can work automatically, which means that these companies do not need employees. For example, computer components can be prepared by robots and they can work 24 hours a day. Considering the economic context, since workers have to have a rest and need to be paid salary in comparison to robots, many employers would rather choose smart machines to help them produce products than recruit worker. As a result, it is unlikely for people to find a job easily.
On the other hand, there is no doubt that technologies have made a big positively difference to our life. We can make use of these high-tech devices to make our way of life more comfortable and timesaving. For example, the high-speed train can reduce the time and economic cost. When people want to have a long distance trip and their budgets and time are limited, the invention of the high-speed train can help them solve this problem. Also, people are allowed to have a video chat with others no matter where they are if there is an internet connection. These people will not worry about their family conditions and it can also help them maintain a good family tie with the help of the internet.
In conclusion, technologies affect our life positively, but the negative influence should not be ignored. I believe that people who rely heavily on technologies may suffer health problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 471, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to smart'
Suggestion: to smart
...ots, many employers would rather choose smart machines to help them produce products ...
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Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...echnologies may suffer health problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 7.85571142285 267% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 423.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85815602837 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65054732777 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510638297872 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 647.1 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7170505075 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.75 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.15 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130749784178 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499311646183 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433954127467 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0973693362227 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483833338156 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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