To improve their appearances, many people spend money a lot of money on products like clothing, haircut, and beauty products. Some people think it is a good way to spend money; other people believe that there are better ways to spend money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In the modern era, people tend to estimate the importance of appearance beauty highly. As a result, many people believe that spending money on beauty services and products is an efficient expenditure. However, the others support more profitable investment. This essay will discuss both views.
On the one hand, there are various reasons why people think appearance is important. Firstly, people are more confident if they have a good looking appearance. It is evident that individuals who have their nice makeup and elegant clothes are more forward than the others. Besides, the first impression is significant; the positive and professional personal image could bring more benefits for people to build their network and also gain more opportunities for their career. Secondly, the news and media, nowadays, support the beauty as one of the factors which lead to success. Those promotions create a global tendency which significantly affects both male and female.
On the other hand, some people argue that it is better to save money or invest in other fields. Saving money has undisputable advantages; many people save money to buy things they can not afford at the moment, such as a car or an apartment, which are more permanent and valuable properties. Besides that, there are many essential fields which some individuals claim to be more consider to invest their money, such as education or health. Those investments can bring a constant lifetime value compares to the temporary benefits of appearance.
In conclusion, while I agree that a beautiful appearance does have its advantages, I believe that people should spend their money on other better purposes such as education or health for a permanent value.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider investing'.
Suggestion: consider investing
...which some individuals claim to be more consider to invest their money, such as education or healt...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 41.998997996 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24275362319 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73466730554 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576086956522 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9392519857 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4666666667 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.86666666667 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368465948557 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118325016863 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112191690226 0.0667982634062 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241754246851 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0776576958302 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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