International travel is becoming cheaper and more and more countries open their door and with more and more tourists Do the advantages of the increased tourism outweigh its disadvantages

Essay topics:

International travel is becoming cheaper, and more and more countries open their door and with more and more tourists.
Do the advantages of the increased tourism outweigh its disadvantages?

As the price of international travel is more affordable, numerous states are trying to open their gate in order to attract more visitors to come to their countries. Both benefits and drawbacks of this issue will be explained in the following paragraphs and I will present my perspective in favour of being more welcome to global holidaymakers.

There are several upsides of this effort. First and foremost, it is capable of uplifting nation's incomes, particularly in their tourism sector. Second but not less crucial, it bestows a new opportunity to their citizen to start a business which is related to tourism. Last but not least, it is able to make their tourism to be more popular rather than previous time.

Besides the benefits, there are two downsides by being more opened to foreign visitors. Firstly, this attempt makes their natural culture to be mixed with other nation's cultures, if they do not conserve their culture properly it will gradually render an impact to their traditions. This effort ,Secondly, also provides more chance to prosperous people to have more businesses which will impact impoverished society being more exploited and have a worsen condition.

By way of conclusion, I do appreciate the opposing view which believed that this endeavour will give some disadvantages. Nevertheless, from my perspective, it will give more strengths than its weaknesses as I already wrote it above. I do believe by continuing this attempt, those states and its communities are able to earn more incomes and make their tourism being well-known by countless people across the globe.

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Average: 5.4 (6 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1346.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19691119691 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8554048768 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590733590734 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5054178704 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.166666667 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344239968786 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13037430044 0.084324248473 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0937990986384 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222266330889 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485216285464 0.056905535591 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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