Internet technology means people do not need to travel to foreign countries to understand how others live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The advent of the Internet has facilitated different aspects of life. While many people believe that this technology can help them understand how experiences in other countries are, I support the idea that traveling is a better avenue to discover others' ways of life.
On the one hand, Internet connections can allow users to be cognizant of life in foreign nations. In fact, Internet users can gain access to an unlimited repository, including a great deal of information about cultures, traditions, and economies worldwide. Thus, people can grasp the theoretical knowledge of a specific country. Furthermore, thanks to the constant development of the Internet, people can have more visually authentic experiences. The introduction of technologies, including virtual reality platforms, can encourage more users' engagement in simulated contexts. As an example, people in Vietnam can admire peach blossoms in Japan with a headset pair. Therefore, the Internet can provide users with information and visual experiences about other countries.
On the other hand, traveling can offer physical experiences. When visiting another country, travelers can immerse themselves in interacting with indigenous communities, which can help them most understand local life. In addition, people can expose to numerous things in a country that can not be found on the Internet, which are authentic food flavors and its weather. While what people explore from the Internet is likely to be similar to others' knowledge, real experiences can enrich people's intrinsic values, which are personal stories, open-mindedness, and memories. Therefore, nothing seems to be comparable with traveling due to the genuine experiences it can bring.
In conclusion, those who want to learn about other cultures can utilize the availability of the Internet. However, I believe that traveling can hold greater values and change people's mindset positively.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 538, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'users'' or 'user's'?
Suggestion: users'; user's
...l reality platforms, can encourage more users engagement in simulated contexts. As an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65172413793 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02825575818 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58275862069 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6499080881 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.4375 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.125 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172250375653 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676331261265 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463581095276 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129701176333 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479515971899 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.19 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 538, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'users'' or 'user's'?
Suggestion: users'; user's
...l reality platforms, can encourage more users engagement in simulated contexts. As an...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65172413793 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02825575818 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58275862069 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6499080881 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.4375 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.125 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172250375653 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676331261265 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463581095276 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129701176333 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479515971899 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.19 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.