It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
It is true that the number of elderly people is predicted to increase significantly and would higher than that of young people in the future. In my opinion, this trend could have both positive and negative consequences in equal measure.
The aging population in the future can have some negative impacts on economic development and society in many countries. Firstly, if people live longer and raise life expectancy in the future, the number of retirees also will increase. Therefore, the government will have to pay retirement pension for them but if there are too many retirees, it will make to reduce the government budget. As a result, the government could not invest more money in economic, which will limit economic growth in the country. Secondly, old people often have some health problems such as heart diseases, cancer or diabetes, so they need to receive the treatment. However, the disease treatment cost is too high, which could put a huge financial burden on their families.
On the other hand, there are some reasons why more elderly people in the future bring several advantages. One reason for this view is that old generation have wide knowledge about many different fields, so youngsters should learn from them. For example, old people can teach young people about the importance of hard-working, patience, doing one’s best. This is necessary for young generation in today’s competitive job market. Furthermore, when there are more and more senior citizens, elderly people would have demand about healthcare systems. The organizations will construct more old people’s home, hospital, medical centres and provide health insurance for old people. This can create huge profit for the companies.
In conclusion, although people living longer in the future will influence the development of country’s economic and create a financial burden on families, I believe that a higher percentage of old people in the future will have beneficial effects on individuals and economy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 180, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ld generation have wide knowledge about many different fields, so youngsters should learn from...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2893081761 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71833474318 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556603773585 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6154480832 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.125 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306426988007 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958045443128 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793678395115 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206378071147 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485354054145 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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