It is generally discussed among the public that extreme sports such as sky diving and rock-climbing should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, there are millions of sports for people to enjoy. However, some of sports may be fatal to health due to the risk involves with the sports and usually those are engaging in extreme sports. While I understand the risk involves within the extreme sports may lead to fatal injuries and even threaten people’s lives, the choice of playing sports should be remaining on people’s hands.
Those extreme sports may lead to fatal injuries and that could result in loss of life. Due to this nature of sports, these sports should be restricted. In this modern era, people are enjoying from being freedom. From this, people are even created of dangerous sports and that lead many people into death. According to American weekly journal, most of young people are dreamt to be the extreme sport players such as F1 players due to the wealth salaries and reputation which shadowed of its dark side of risks and fatal injuries. From this example, we can conclude that extreme sports are deadliness and fatality in its nature. Therefore, it is reasonable to prevent people’s lives from participating in suicidal actions.
In contrast, extreme sports are the mere choice from people. Even though those extreme sports are dangerous and can cost someone’s lives, sportsmen have chosen those paths. For example, F1 players or sky divers are well known of their circumstances because they are always heard of the risks and consequences before playing the sports. If people are taken the career paths as an extreme sport player, then it is their choice they made as an adult. Therefore, these decisions should be respected and confirmed instead of restricting and limiting the choices due to the risky consequences.
In conclusion, despite the diversity sport types, extreme sports can be fatal to human as it can cost someone’s lives. However, it is not reasonable to prevent those sports from playing because of risky consequences. The reason for this is, the players of extreme sports are chosen to play those sports as a career path and they are passionate about their jobs. Therefore, restricting those sports from playing can mean that it is restricting people’s positions.
Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'in contrast', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.242280285036 0.247107183377 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.161520190024 0.155533422707 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0973871733967 0.0946595960268 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0356294536817 0.0501214627716 71% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0356294536817 0.0437548338989 81% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118764845606 0.122226691241 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0593824228029 0.0403226058552 147% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69838377081 2.80594681477 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0332541567696 0.0326793684256 102% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0855106888361 0.0861772015684 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0285035629454 0.021408717616 133% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00237529691211 0.011925033212 20% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2197.0 1933.35771543 114% => OK
No of words: 359.0 316.048096192 114% => OK
Chars per words: 6.11977715877 6.12580529183 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20517956788 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.409470752089 0.374742101984 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.259052924791 0.28420135186 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.16713091922 0.203846283523 82% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.105849582173 0.137316102897 77% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69838377081 2.80594681477 96% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.037074148 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451253481894 0.56093040696 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.3787290663 60.7387585426 76% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0891783567 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.8947368421 20.7743622355 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4443067095 49.517814964 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.631578947 127.492653851 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 20.7743622355 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.631578947368 0.814263465372 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.99599198397 0% => OK
Readability: 44.8000293212 49.1944974215 91% => OK
Elegance: 1.80612244898 1.69124875643 107% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273492176047 0.332605444948 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.127505087025 0.102741220458 124% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.080822116938 0.0668466124924 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.523422216951 0.534860350844 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.120424307657 0.148594505496 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120547373223 0.134430193775 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489485514458 0.0742795772207 66% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.506223880483 0.324371583561 156% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0436707956636 0.0638462369009 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217547856222 0.228012699653 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.012086749603 0.058150111329 21% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.68436873747 46% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 5.90881763527 68% => OK
Negative topic words: 12.0 2.5751503006 466% => Less negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 10.4468937876 172% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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