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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?What sort of punishment should parents and

Essay topics: It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

Mai Uyen's picture

It is said that punishment plays an integral part in educating youngsters what is right or wrong. In my opinion, I completely agree with this idea.
I do believe that young children should be well aware of the distinction between right and wrong because this may affect greatly to their later adolescence formation. According to a survey conducted by Ministry of Culture, Sports and Tourism in Vietnam , children who come from adverse background and lack the supervisors are in high risk of committing crime. This is also closely linked with other pressing issues such as robbery, raping, which can threaten the social security. Moreover, the limited education on the youngster may trigger culture erosion. As children at an early age hardly know the differences between morality and immorality, they properly break the moral and ethic regulations thereby ignoring traditional values.
In order to prevent children from being at faults, depending on the level of their mistakes, some proper punishment should be taken. Firstly, for families, violence should not be resorted since early exposure to violence may adversely affect mental and physical health of children. Youngsters should be kept in detention to realize their bad behavior by themselves. From the school standpoint, according to the degree of regulation contravention, punishments from warning to forcing to abandon the school should be implemented.
In conclusion, it seems to me that it is of great importance to raise ethic awareness among children and proper penalty should be resorted to prevent youngster from bad behaviors.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 242, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Ministry of Culture, Sports and Tourism in Vietnam , children who come from adve...
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Line 2, column 254, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... Culture, Sports and Tourism in Vietnam , children who come from adverse backgrou...
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Line 3, column 484, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'abandoning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: abandoning
...on, punishments from warning to forcing to abandon the school should be implemented. In ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, well, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1349.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.396 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84705332014 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.64 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6432619029 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.416666667 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247212207652 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884263541804 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631414997327 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157225310787 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0862696738188 0.056905535591 152% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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