It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age, citizens all cross the world have been facing unpredictable outbreak of diseases. It is argued that the state should increase their spending on raising public awareness of a healthy way of living rather on providing timely treatment for already ill people. I will discuss both aspects of the matter, before presenting my own opinion.
On the one hand, without a doubt, “prevention is better than cure”, therefore authorities should have feasible policies in making it residents adopt a healthy lifestyle. The popularity of health programs, campaigns and name it a few invested by governments which make an important to enhancing people’s awareness health problems. Thanks to those, they can be better informed of adequate and useful knowledge by health experts, related to potential risks resulting in bad habits. For an example, instead of excessive consumption of junk food, people are likely to make healthier food choices or prepare slap-up meals at home on a daily basis which can prevent the high incidence of obesity and other fatal diseases.
In addition to their long-term positive effects on people’s frame mind, although such campaigns are cost-effective, the authorities still need to allocate a certain amount of money to convey positive messages via social networking sites or conducting various workshops to share advice and experience to the public. Because, the hospital fees are expensive in some countries, especially developed ones that only the rich can afford, the government cannot ignore its obligation in improving their medical system as well as assisting the already ill patients covering their medical fees besides raising public awareness. More importantly, the authorities’ role in offering aid for treating the sick is a moral duty.
In conclusion, although allocating a part of national budgets to promoting residents’ healthier lifestyle plays a crucial role, the government should not neglect its concern on the supply of medical treatments and sponsor an amount of money for those currently being ill.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of money for those currently being ill.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, so, still, therefore, well, in addition, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42414860681 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88772349525 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.66253869969 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.7467064529 49.4020404114 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.272727273 106.682146367 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3636363636 20.7667163134 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183584906848 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564827215945 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589213575347 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102316160423 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264579196306 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.75 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.45 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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