It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree of disagree?
To a certain extent, I completely believe that public funds are more essential than spending on the treatment of individuals already ill for the promotion of a safe lifestyle in order to avoid illness.
There are two main reasons why national money should be spent more on encouraging a healthy lifestyle to avoid disease than on treating those who are already unwell. In terms of expenses, effective prevention is, in the long run, less costly than cure, for both patients and the whole society as well. In particular, effective illness prevention will reduce the number of patients, which will lower the state’s spending on healthcare services. Take the coronavirus, for example, the government underestimates the danger of this virus, so they do not take timely preventive measures and as a result, this pandemic spread across the globe and millions of people have died. Moreover, hospitals were full and did not have enough oxygen for people so the government has to buy it from other nations which caused a lot of money, time and effort to purchase and transport it back to the country.
A healthy lifestyle free of fast food should be advocated so that individuals avoid ailments resulting from eating such as obesity and many cardiovascular diseases. It is also should be regularly pointed out by the authorities that living a healthy life by working out on a daily basis will improve people’s immune system, avoid various inflammations and mental health problems, such as depression. As a result, fewer patients will have to visit hospitals, thus, reduce the amount of money spent on hospitalization and other medical fees.
In conclusion, for the reason I have mentioned above, I strongly believe that the spending of government's money should be centered on illness prevention by raising public awareness of regular exercise and healthy eating habits.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, thus, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, in particular, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1574.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17763157895 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83380091601 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575657894737 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.0073677068 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.4 106.682146367 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4 20.7667163134 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291805536548 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11166426711 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104930070082 0.0667982634062 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203915340115 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113757946311 0.056905535591 200% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.