Some people think the qualities a person needs to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution.To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
To a certain extent, I agree that in today's society, universities and other academic institutions cannot equip students with qualities necessary for their success in life. However, I also believed that these qualities can be fully learned at schools as long as the student is conscious of self-improvement.
There are two main reasons why that knowledge and skills that are necessary for their life success such as time-management and leadership can also be learned in schools, by doing all the assignments and activities. For instance, they can learn how to successfully manage their time budget by attempting to finish all the homework before the deadline. Furthermore, they can join some clubs to be more active and responsible. Thanks to group projects, pupils can know how to show solidarity with others and better their ability to lead a team.
Apart from the practical benefits expressed above,l I believed that it is still not enough for an individual to become fully grow since only students who have a thirst for improvement can make good use of their school life to equip themselves with necessary qualities for their success. In schools, teachers tend to teach basic and theoretical knowledge while in a real situation, it might not happen in that sense of ways so you adults, when coming to life, may not perform well in work, this results in unemployment or a job with low salary. Moreover, young employees usually fall behind with their co-workers because they are too overwhelmed by how life in society is more complicated and intense than they have imagined.
In conclusion, for the reasons I have mentioned above, I strongly believed that life experience, failures, relationships are more important than knowledge in some old books. At the same time, I also think that academic institutions including universities are good places for undergraduates to gain qualities essential for their successful life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 50, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , l
...m the practical benefits expressed above,l I believed that it is still not enough ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, well, while, apart from, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16987179487 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9644906337 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.5434782275 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.636363636 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3636363636 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8181818182 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179823485507 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793594314795 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793788051898 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13545994455 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0879527673846 0.056905535591 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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