It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. Do you agree that this is the main cause of juvenile crime? What solutions can you offer to deal with this situation?
In this age of cutting-edge technology, media has gradually influenced every aspect of our life, particularly in terms of children’s mind. There exists some schools of thought that violence in the media leads to the increase in juvenile crime. From my perspective, I totally agree that this is the prime cause of juvenile delinquency. Thus, pragmatic solutions should be taken as soon as possible to mitigate this phenomenon.
To begin with, the inexorable rise in juvenile offenders can be mainly ascribed to the influence of violent and aggressive behavior through many kinds of media platforms. The reason for this is violent games or videos including bloody scenes and great physical torment will exert negative implications on children’s cognitive development. Take a prime example of this is the addiction to computer games of Vietnamese children, especially violent games. Since they can live in a virtual world where any aggressive actions are rewarded, they gradually bear a deep-seated belief in mind that violence is funny, inconsequential and a viable solution to problems, for which they will not receive any strict penalty from the government. Therefore, children are inclined to develop aggressive and rowdy behaviors, or seriously willing to resort to violence and commit heinous crimes to satisfy their demands.
In the face of the escalating juvenile crime rates, there is plenty of room for practical solutions to help reduce violence on juvenile behavior. First and foremost, the government needs to take action in the assessment of any social media, thus it will significantly decrease the amount of violent or inappropriate content. Besides, children also should be carefully monitored by their parents in what they are watching and playing to ensure that they can stay away from violence on media platforms.
In conclusion, violence in the media is considered a main reason for the increase in juvenile crime due to the pernicious effects being done to children’s development. As a consequence, different down-to-earth measures must be taken for the alleviation of this problem, which are the government's action and parents’ monitor.
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...eviation of this problem, which are the governments action and parents’ monitor.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46153846154 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02693809968 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565088757396 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1127721472 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.857142857 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35714285714 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32780217164 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117847634751 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770639866312 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214844994824 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540601931121 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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