It is suggested that all the young adults should undertake a period of unpaid work helping people in the community Does it bring more benefits or drawbacks to the community and the young people

Essay topics:

It is suggested that all the young adults should undertake a period of unpaid work helping people in the community. Does it bring more benefits or drawbacks to the community and the young people.

Adolescents throughout the world are recommended to participate in volunteer events when they have free time. Some people argue that youth should spend more time on paid work, while positive impacts of self-development can be gained by joining a plethora of voluntary services. I totally advocate that society and the youth can be beneficial by joining more unpaid programs.

The fundamental reason is that volunteer work gives youth opportunities to learn to communicate with others. In the perspective of whole-person development, adolescents are encouraged to build up their self-confidence and leadership skills during helping others when after school. In addition, young people are worth developing their sincerity to deprive people who are in need. For instance, in Hong Kong, secondary schools organize various kinds of volunteer activities for the students in order to encourage them for having a healthy social life. It results in maintaining a harmonic community with people having the enormous intention of helping lower-class inhabitants. From these advantages, it is worth reinforcing students to serve others in the community.

On the other side, social networks are gained during voluntary services as they have sufficient opportunities to meet new friends and employers. This is astonishingly significant for students to seek a suitable job in the, and this is what schools cannot provide them. Although most of the companies consider the qualifications of the interviewees, previous volunteer experience is also a crucial requirement in order to familiar with the attitude of the applicants. In addition, there is an intensive research by Oxford University, it indicates that 90 percent of the student can find a suitable job easily as having voluntary experience. Because of this, doing voluntary works is not only beneficial for self-development but also helping their career in the future.

To recapitulate, despite there are a plethora of positive impacts by doing paid work, it is recommended that youth people should take more opportunities to participate in volunteer services.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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... for students to seek a suitable job in the, and this is what schools cannot provide...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, while, for instance, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58255451713 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22459552868 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548286604361 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0684410197 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.466666667 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.93333333333 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154699064901 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523038487333 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658003871413 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100379826087 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488656338208 0.056905535591 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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