It is true to say that in the new millennium and by the advent of technological devices involving smartphones and security cameras people are being watched constantly.

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It is true to say that in the new millennium and by the advent of technological devices involving smartphones and security cameras people are being watched constantly.

It is true to say that in the new millennium and by the advent of technological devices involving smartphones and security cameras people are being watched constantly. By my reckoning, this policy has its own pros and cons, however, the advantages are far higher than the disadvantages provided that the data used for the benefits of the community.
On the one hand, as a result of utilizing CCTV and video recorder, criminals are being monitored, which could contribute to diminishing the crime rate. As a case in point, offenders can be arrested and condemned far easier if the police know about their plan in advance and have proof to offer the judge and jury. In addition to this, via cellphone tracking by scrupulous and honest authorities, it would be possible to avoid corruption in the government and the rate of nepotism and fraud will decrease considerably.
On the other hand, there are some dangers if the data misused. Firstly, privacy could be harmed. It could be true that in most cases people are unaware that they are being monitored; nevertheless, no one has the right to ignore the privacy of others. It is unethical and immoral to behave others, irrespective of their age and genders, like criminals. By doing so, even kissing a loved one is being watched by strangers. Secondly, There is almost always the danger of misusing the data by other sectors. Therefore, there should be strict laws to address these issues in advanced.
To sum up, it is crystal clear that tracking people via the security cameras or their smartphone is not acceptable ethically, however, the benefits gained from this tactic are much more than the drawbacks as long as the privacy of people respected and the data employed sagaciously.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, in addition, as a result, in most cases, it is true, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93174061433 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75589608829 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576791808874 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.9574624306 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.153846154 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5384615385 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4615384615 7.06120827912 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337178562906 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120499118162 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.258019851423 0.0667982634062 386% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207462473036 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.185672208551 0.056905535591 326% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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