The bar chart demonstrates the proportion of British individuals donating part of their emolument to benevolent organizations in two different time span.

Essay topics:

The bar chart demonstrates the proportion of British individuals donating part of their emolument to benevolent organizations in two different time span.

The bar chart demonstrates the proportion of British individuals donating part of their emolument to the benevolent organization in two different time span.
Overall, as can be seen, with the exception of senior citizens, the more people get older, the more they donate their money.
Looking at the graph, it is crystal clear that in 1990 the percentage of donation in 18-25 years old people is roughly three-fold compared with their counterparts in 2010. The gap has diminished in the 25-36 group, however, in 1990 slightly more people gave their money in comparison with 2010, each constituting nearly 30% and 24% respectively. Adults British aging between 36 to 65, spent far more money than other people for charities. Also, in the 51-65 group, more people in 2010 gave money to humanitarian organizations than in 1990 with approximately 40% and 35% respectively. Finally, the senescent people spent less than adults for charities and their percentage reached 35% in 2010 and 32% in 1990.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'span' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'spans'.
Suggestion: spans
...lent organization in two different time span. Overall, as can be seen, with the exc...
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Line 2, column 26, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
...nt time span. Overall, as can be seen, with the exception of senior citizens, the more people get ol...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 835.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15432098765 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86396470957 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 234.0 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.0864074655 43.030603864 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.285714286 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.23603664747 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267686371583 0.215688989381 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177833549566 0.103423049105 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.335888495706 0.0843802449381 398% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.37389314658 0.15604864568 240% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.442724804509 0.0819641961636 540% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.2329268293 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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