Many children these days have unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parent are responsible for solving this problem.To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Essay topics:

Many children these days have unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parent are responsible for solving this problem.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?

One of the highly controversial issues these days relates to whether or not children should be educated by both parents and schools to follow healthier ways of living. It is not a secret that both these institutions are fundamental in the way kids are raised, and I largely agree with those who believe that educators and parents should be responsible for children's lifestyles.
Being the primary caretakers, parents spend most of their time with their children and most of their habits are picked up by their kids and can have a huge impact on them. A particularly good example here is the way parents eat. unhealthy eating habits can easily be passed on children, putting the foundations for their eating lifestyle. For instance, if children see their parents making healthy choices in what food they have and in the physical activity they engage in, kids will be more likely to follow their parents' footsteps. parents are the first and maybe biggest role models for their sons and daughters.
However, schools and teachers can play an important role in establishing good and healthy habits in youngsters. When children start going to school, they end up spending most of their time with their educators and classmates, learning academic subjects but also lifestyle practices. Therefore, if schools and institutions could invest more to provide healthier meals in schools' cafeterias and more efficient physical education classes, children would understand more every day the importance of the way they eat and the way they keep active.
To conclude, I feel that not only parents and not only schools should be responsible for kids' lifestyles but, conversely, both the institutions should work in synergy to raise children who know how to take care of their body. Hence, I agree completely with considering parents and schools the key to solve the unhealthy lifestyles problem.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 229, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Unhealthy
...od example here is the way parents eat. unhealthy eating habits can easily be passed on c...
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Line 2, column 534, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Parents
...kely to follow their parents footsteps. parents are the first and maybe biggest role mo...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 320, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lifestyles'' or 'lifestyle's'?
Suggestion: lifestyles'; lifestyle's
... schools the key to solve the unhealthy lifestyles problem.
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13680781759 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70012337014 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524429967427 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.9227366039 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.416666667 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5833333333 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251211008231 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107939682106 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653576097013 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170453167835 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588348672848 0.056905535591 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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