In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence.

Essay topics:

In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence.

In the past, it was a costume for the father to be the only earner of the family, while the mother stayed home taking care of the children and the household. In modern times, though, this costume changed drastically, not only because women gained the same right as men to work, but because many parents find it necessary to have two incomes in order to sustain the family. Whilst the additional income may bring financial security and benefits to everyone, especially the children, there are several drawbacks that cannot be overlooked. while some families can choose to have only one working parent, some others have to have both parents earning an income because of the circumstances. Surely, kids benefit from the enlarged economic possibilities of their family: more toys, experiences to make, vacations to go to. On the other hand, children have to be taken care of by someone else and might feel abandoned by their parents not being always there for them. it is also proven that children whose parents are not always at home have more behavioral problems. For instance, while I grew up with my mother always being home with me, my little sister didn't, because our mom had to go back to work to provide for the enlarged family. In turn, my sister has to battle with her insecurity of being unwanted and tries to seek the attention of her teacher by behaving badly in the class. Given these points, there is no need for both parents to be working and not be there for their kids while they grow up unless it is strictly necessary. while the additional income benefits the children, the presence of a mother or father will be the best for the children's well being in the long run.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, may, so, well, while, as to, for instance, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67003367003 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41045932143 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548821548822 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 26.4968421633 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 126.090909091 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286585975903 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110084606833 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625875654768 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286585975903 0.151304729494 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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