Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Essay topics:

Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Nowadays, children’s lifestyle has changed owing to several reasons such as: lack of physical activity, smoking, poor diet and etc. Although, many people believe that the onus is only on parents and schools, I strongly opposed to and feel that government is also responsible for such problems.
To begin with, parents and schools are responsible for children health, respectively at home and at school. Children could have thought from their oldest easily. For instance, if parents don’t smoke, or if they exercise every day, unconsciously it would affect children and make them to behave like their parents. Or if high quality nutrition serves at school, students wouldn’t go for unhealthy ones.
On the other hand, as parents and schools could just have access on children only when they are nearby, the government has also a major responsibility for children. Due to existence of unsafe and unhealthy society, children could have access easily to drugs and such things. Unfortunately, there is no age ban in our country and it becomes more common day by day. The other problem is air pollutant which cloud has serious effects on children’s mind. Of course this is the government’s obligation to deal with. They should implement some lows to control such problems.
In conclusion, due to the mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that in addition to parents and schools, government also has considerable role in children’s lifestyle, because these days children are more attend in society and it is the government duty to make it possible for keeping them healthy.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...f physical activity, smoking, poor diet and etc. Although, many people believe that the ...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, of course, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1347.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28235294118 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01104975174 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.9453353823 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.615384615 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6153846154 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30769230769 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28325098681 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970129824084 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551118287823 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163504133416 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539044322952 0.056905535591 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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