In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.
What are your opinion on this?
Recently, the phenomenon of children working and its corresponding impacts have sparked a long-running dispute. In this regard, whereas loads of individuals believe that experiences of paid work are essential for children, others are of the opinion that engaging in paid work for pupils is downright unacceptable. In my mind, children should not be deprived the pleasure of acquiring money, while they can benefit from working in terms of psychological and financial aspects.
Obviously, involving in true paid work, leads to children’s promotion with respect to psychology. It contributes to far higher self-esteem in adolescence thanks to earning income independently. Psychologically speaking, the sensation of becoming independent paves the way to taking responsibilities in not distant future.
In addition, through engaging in paid work, youngsters are capable of enhancing their financial mindset. They will realize that earing income is far from easy in the real world and so they shall be prepared to save, or even investigate, a proportion of their salaries, whether minority or majority of their income. Moreover, it is more likely that young children will learn how to manage financial disasters in their future life.
On the other hand, we shouldn’t lose sight of opponents. They elucidate that if children work for money, they would be distracted from school environment. Thus, working experience brings with itself different levels of distraction. The lack of concentration on school and study not merely may ends up potential failures in school’s subjects, but also some students probably ponder about the fact that they would be more successful if they quit school rather than wasting their time on struggling with homework.
To sum up, despite compelling arguments on both sides, I opt to vigorously support the idea that the merits of paid work for children far outweigh its downsides. Who knows some of these experiences exert students to become a prominent craftsman or entrepreneur like Edison?
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... its corresponding impacts have sparked a long-running dispute. In this regard, whereas loads ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, thus, whereas, while, in addition, to sum up, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1715.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46178343949 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06664747689 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624203821656 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8903038018 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.333333333 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9333333333 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270900966704 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0870983590864 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844359990986 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141755769856 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0853125438577 0.056905535591 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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