In many countries people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight.
What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
Gaining weight especially in young teenagers is a major anxious matter amongst many countries. Children became fat because of the modernization and technology advancement. This essay will discuss for the problems of obesity in young people and the responsibilities for the government, the society and the parents.
It is likely that one of the prominent causes giving rises to this problem is the major change in our lifestyle due to remarkable advancement in technology, which has considerable impact on our daily life and health. Children could consume many junk foods at any time, which we consume every day made the matters worse. These foods, which are easily available, often contain ingredients that are highly in calorie, cholesterol and fat, while lack necessary vitamin, mineral and protein and these factors are taking a toll on our health. In addition, teenagers are playing with their computers rather than playing outside. As a result, teenagers are lacking in exercises and becoming overweight.
In my opinion, teachers, parents and government as a whole should take this issue as an emergency and take a necessary step. For instance, parents are keep an eye on their children’s eating habit and make sure to take healthy food while reducing the quality of junk food. The government could limit junk food advertising to discourage children to fail for the bad eating habits.
In conclusion, although many countries are now falling in the similar issues of unhealthy diet but we can defeat this issue by following the steps such as the limit of the junk food consumed by children.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1355.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21153846154 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82007543229 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607692307692 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4124795702 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.916666667 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.08333333333 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107301440242 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0380900911609 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0285812697425 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0700510713178 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289954134814 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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