In many countries, people now wear Western clothes (suits, jeans) rather than the traditional clothing. Why? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In many countries, people now wear Western clothes (suits, jeans) rather than the traditional clothing. Why? Is this a positive or negative development?

In recent decades, the locals in many countries wear suits and jeans as their daily clothes even rather than their own countries’ costumes. Although some traditionalists judge this trend as a negative pattern, the benefits it brings to nations should not be unjustifiable.
On the one hand, Western cloth acts as a deterrent for national culture and domestic economy. First, since local people are reliant on modern clothes both at work and in daily life, their unique traditional ones are likely to be undervalued. In reality, although Aodai is one of Vietnamese tangible cultures, hardly can people, even the locals can easily see Vietnamese women wearing Aodai on the street, excepts for some required by their career characteristics such as teachers or restaurant receptions. Second, taxes imposed on foreign clothes benefit the export countries at the expense of the import ones. Moreover, since apparel industry accounts for large economic proportion, this exotic trend can drive a nation to be less affluent.
On the other hand, Western cloth import also has its own advantages in term of variety of choices and honors for traditional costumes. First, cloth corporations oversea contribute to competitive apparel market where consumers can choose their favorite with lowest cost. In practice, suits and jeans do not require either hand washing or warm water like silk or feather material fabric; it is more economical and less time-consuming. Finally, if people wear traditional clothes daily, it tends to become usual in the eyes of foreigners so that Western cloth appears as a substitute helping a to enhance values of its costume. For example, now that the Japanese white-collar workers dress suits and shirts for business while they just wear Kimonos in some special occasions, Kimonos are well-known around the world and become country’s symbol .
In conclusion, while Western clothes are believed to cause harm to nations, the opposite side appears to be more persuasive, which means in terms of either culture or economy, wearing Western clothes allows both the nations and the locals to have more benefits by giving them wider ranges of choices and values.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: with the lowest
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, moreover, second, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30259365994 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7904177997 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590778097983 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.2201382344 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.538461538 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6923076923 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21636642621 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747189292693 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510046496108 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134939644182 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389787630203 0.056905535591 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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