In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on the society?
It is true that in many parts of the world, the number of senior citizens is on the rise. From my perspective, this demographic shift would bring about some benefits, but its drawbacks could be far higher.
First of all, there are a wide range of merits when human beings live longer. One possible advantage is the invaluable lessons that oldies can pass on to their descendants. To be more specific, older people have accumulated a hoard of knowledge and experience through their lives, so they could give precious advices about not only personal but also professional matters to the younger generations. The youngsters accordingly could emulate their forefathers’ ways to succeed and avoid a dead-end. What is more, the aged population might make great contribution to the community by engaging in voluntary work. For example, they could do unpaid activities such as teaching in the orphanage or helping the disabled and the homeless. The social participation would in turn boost their well-being, which will ease the burden on state welfare.
However, as people grow older, the whole society would be faced with a multitude of problems. The first issue would be increased demands for medical and social care, which will put a strain on the public funds. In other words, a rise in money allocated to the aged means a fall in the sum channeled into other key sectors namely education, economy and transportation. Another downside of longer life expectancy is that the years retirees receive pension surpass the years they are active in the workforce. There is no denying that the increasing number of old age pensioners, together with the dwindling of labor force, will potentially place greater pressure on the working-age population in terms of tax income. It should also be noted that as people reach pensionable age, their spending on consumer goods will be reduced, leading to the shrinking of the economic sector.
In sum, for the reasons mentioned above, the advantages of increasing longevity and ageing population are still overshadowed by the disadvantages. I would therefore claim that this is a negative development for both individuals and societies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, for example, such as, first of all, in other words, it is true, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15297450425 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8652482926 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628895184136 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1127304215 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.70588235294 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11330706623 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0328151108608 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380127909091 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0664168273366 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0104718379173 0.056905535591 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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