In many countries there has been an increase in social problems involving teenagers in recent years. Many people believe that this is due to modern lifestyles because parents spend more and more time at work and have less time to supervise their children. To what extent do you believe this is true?
Youngsters are developing antisocial behavior more often in this modern society. Some people believe this behavior pattern is due to their upbringing since their parents find it difficult to share their time with them, and supervise them as a result of high working load, and I completely agree with this statement.
Spending more time on video games instead of having fun with family members is a major reason of the social problems caused by teenagers. Parents are now spending a majority of their day time at work, which makes them so exhausted that they may not be able to have a quality time with their teenagers at evenings. Children, therefore, turn to their computers and game consoles which may have violent content. Observing violation on video games on a daily basis have resulted in more aggressive behavior. For example, Mortal Combat, which is a very popular game, is about war and armed crime, and teaches players how to use guns to kill.
Lower level of intimacy between generations in family is another reason of this issue. Older generation can act as a role model when they are trustworthy for young individuals. Parents, nowadays, do not have enough time to develop this trust. Instead, there are older people outside in the society to whom adolescents may confide in, while those people are not usually a proper role model, and some of them may even be criminals. In other words, the more adolescents look up to strangers, the more likely they are to get involved in gangs.
In conclusion, watching violent content on screen and not having a close-knit family are two major reasons that have brought about more antisocial behavior in adolescents, and I strongly believe that those two mentioned above have happened because parents are spending too much time at work
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1495.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96677740864 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54552700428 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581395348837 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7482151178 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338544604967 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109449661212 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078346992954 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199692272867 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481656878432 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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