In many countries, there is no access to education for children in remote villages/communities. Some people believe that the best solution is to provide teachers and schools. Others think computer and internet connection is better selection. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is commonly believed that most children dwelling in remote rural localities do not benefit from education. While some argue that a possible solution to this is to establish educational institutions and bring a number of teacher, others claim that computers and the internet access would facilitate children's education. In my opinion, young people who do not have access to education are undoubtedly in need of both schools and the internet.
On the one hand, in most countries it is mandatory for children to enroll at school and receive education until a certain age at least. Thereby, according to the law, every children has the right to education. The government should ensure that schools will be built in remote areas and that they will offer well-equipped laboratories and properly trained teachers. It is of paramount importance for young people to get educated so that they may become valuable and skilled workers in the future. Furthermore, providing children living in remote areas with schools and teachers is likely to make them capable of improving the poor situation of their hometowns.
On the other hand, studies have proved that a child who is given a computer connected to the internet can easily browse the Web and consequently acquire vast information even if he has never had knowledge regarding computers prior to this. Hence, to a certain degree, children are bound to learn a variety of things by merely surfing the internet. Nevertheless, a drawback is the fact that young people can get in touch with dangerous persons or enter web pages having an inappropriate content for their age. It is necessary to make sure that the youngsters use the internet only for well-intentioned and educational purposes.
To conclude, I strongly believe that the most effective approach to the matter in question is to incorporate technology (computers, the internet) into the teaching methods so as to arouse the pupils' interest as much as possible. It is clear that remote communities ought to be heavily reformed in terms of education system and this can be achieved only by providing educational facilities.
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'regarding', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'as to', 'at least', 'in my opinion', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.238219895288 0.247107183377 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.164921465969 0.155533422707 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0968586387435 0.0946595960268 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0628272251309 0.0501214627716 125% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0340314136126 0.0437548338989 78% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123036649215 0.122226691241 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0523560209424 0.0403226058552 130% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.89603887358 2.80594681477 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0471204188482 0.0326793684256 144% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0916230366492 0.0861772015684 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0235602094241 0.021408717616 110% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00523560209424 0.011925033212 44% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2142.0 1933.35771543 111% => OK
No of words: 349.0 316.048096192 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.13753581662 6.12580529183 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20517956788 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.389684813754 0.374742101984 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.30659025788 0.28420135186 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.243553008596 0.203846283523 119% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.154727793696 0.137316102897 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89603887358 2.80594681477 103% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.037074148 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567335243553 0.56093040696 101% => OK
Word variations: 63.3651167073 60.7387585426 104% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0891783567 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.9285714286 20.7743622355 120% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6888833151 49.517814964 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.0 127.492653851 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9285714286 20.7743622355 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.814263465372 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 55.5875972165 49.1944974215 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.58 1.69124875643 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.50941237348 0.332605444948 153% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0830398272884 0.102741220458 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.041369972537 0.0668466124924 62% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.564171649568 0.534860350844 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.102690294187 0.148594505496 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.217764423097 0.134430193775 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514514411355 0.0742795772207 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.430652302973 0.324371583561 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.00316669735905 0.0638462369009 5% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.365499809524 0.228012699653 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569721450824 0.058150111329 98% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 5.90881763527 169% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 10.4468937876 134% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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