Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge experience.
Write at least 250 words.
There is no doubt that many health deficits result from the high levels of sugar in manufactured food and beverage. Some people think that higher price for sugary products would prevent the overconsumption of sugar. However, I completely disagree with this view, because there are more appropriate solutions to tackle this problem.
To begin with, making sugary products more expensive causes more problems rather than solving the overconsumption of sugar. Sugary products include some types of food which we eat every day such as rice and bread. Those foods are really important in our diet because they provide us with energy to work and nutrients to grow up. Therefore, raising the prices of those products would make people unable to purchase the most essential food. For example, if the poor people can not afford a few loads of bread daily, they can not make living and support their families.
Furthermore, there are more proper ways to deal with the sugary overconsuming. First, factories should inform the customers the ingredients of their products in accurate percentage by printing them outstandingly on the labels. In this way, people can know how much sugar and other substances they consume per product, thus figure out wise diets to avoid sugary overconsumption and improve their health. Second, due to the fact that many people do not know the adequate amount of each nutrient they need to support their body, there must be more programs to illustrate people about that important knowledge. Those programs can be TV shows, extracurricular activities at school and other forms to reach many kinds of people, because people of different ages, jobs need particular diets. For instance, elderly should cut down on sugar consumption to avoid heart diseases.
In conclusion, from my point of view, raising the prices of sugary products is not a good choice to handle the health problems caused by the manufactured sugary products. By informing people about the products and the demand of their body, they can prevent sugary overconsumption and many health problems related to it.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, really, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17058823529 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69597932082 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561764705882 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7700446428 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.875 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364681533765 0.244688304435 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120463968309 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674492520005 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238278729602 0.151304729494 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371721299637 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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