Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Most processed foodstuffs and liquors are responsible for health hazards as they are rich in sugar. The price of those products should be more to make people consume healthier foods. I strongly disagree with this notion since the cost only does not change people's perception and also declines the profit of industries producing packaged foods.
Most people consume manufactured foods and drinks for their satisfaction and relaxation. An increase in price may keep the individual's choice to consume those products the same. They might allocate more budget to get the same level of satisfaction rather than replace it with healthier options, which is directly correlated with the person's behaviour. Moreover, most people put much more emphasis on junk foods irrespective of price change. For example, recent studies suggest that people prefer to consume noodles as snacks regardless of the price change.
An increase in the price of products declines the sales of manufactured food items. As the price increase, the overall demand for commodities decreases resulting in less overall profit. Moreover, a decline in overall profits leads to the shutting down of industries based on manufacturing items. For instance, many enterprises in Nepal are on the verge of closing due to an increase in the price of products and a decline in overall sales and profits.
In conclusion, processed food items should be made costly to motivate people to eat healthier foods. Meanwhile, I disagree as people's behaviour does not change only due to the price increment; it also affects the overall profit of packaged food-based enterprises.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, may, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33852140078 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78203858328 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525291828794 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.8562619994 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238124709852 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887157115086 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537462992517 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143337588551 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302429908028 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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