Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people.
Why is it the case?
What can be done to attract local people to visit these places?
It is undeniable that most visitors of museums and historical sites are tourists not local people. In this essay, I will outline the reasons of this situation, and also provides possible ways to encourage local people to visit these places.
The museums and historical sites were ignored by local people for many reasons. First, these places are not something new for people who lives in those areas. Consequently, it is not an interesting place for visitting, or taking photographs due to the fact that most people who living there has ever visitted but it is new for tourists. What is more, one of the tourists’ goal in visitting other coutries is to learn a different cultures and lifestyle of people in the coutries they visitted. According to the museum and historical places held many story of people in the past, they can enjoy learning culture and historical knowledge of people in those countries.
On the other hand, this problems can be solved by several ways. Most importantly, the historical places has to be more interesting for local people, such as having a new shows, reorganise how to present the story accompanied by the support from government in terms of promotions and capital subsidy. Another things which can be done is a campaign encourage local to travel in their places instead of travel outside. For example, travel expenses from going to their musuems could be a tax exemption by being a reduction in individual’s revenue before tax.
To sum up, musuem and historical sites are less popular among local people since it is not something new for them, however, there are many several things to encourage local people to visit, such as bringing more interesting things to there accompanied by the support from government.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 550, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun story seems to be countable; consider using: 'many stories'.
Suggestion: many stories
...o the museum and historical places held many story of people in the past, they can enjoy l...
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Line 3, column 21, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...n those countries. On the other hand, this problems can be solved by several ways....
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Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'show'?
Suggestion: show
... for local people, such as having a new shows, reorganise how to present the story ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, another thing, as to, for example, such as, to sum up, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1471.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0204778157 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76926653544 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515358361775 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.091368929 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.583333333 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4166666667 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.428741317729 0.244688304435 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164171109939 0.084324248473 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812731251403 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262969902983 0.151304729494 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559979045987 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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