Many offenders commit more crime after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening and what solutions are of those?
In recent decades, governments from over the world have started to develop and launch the new supporting approaches on illness and health of their citizens. some point out that it is suitable to spend these money on rising people awareness with posters or advertisements. On the other hand, some maintain that there are thousands of people suffering from sickness who need lots of money and help. From where I stand, the more efficient strategy for this is promoting a good lifestyle rather than subsidise medications.
there are numerous supporting points for paying for media and promoting. people needs to realise on the first stage that exercising and healthy vegetables are a must in their daily life. rising their awareness can prevent illness and cancer from the beginning, therefore, less people facing sickness and the government might save a dramatical number of money that can be used for others things such as economics, educations.
Nevertheless, lots of reasons can be listed in order to advocate spending on treatment. In every area, from cities to slums, there are always people who are close to death or live in pain day by day and unable to afford their medication and bills. For that reason, those citizens required so much help and supports from not only from community but also the government.
All in all, both approaches are crucial and might help lots of people, however, spending money to rising awareness to the whole society is overweight spending on medications. people need to pay much more attention on diets, nutrition and working out so as to strengthen their own physical health and stay away from illness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, as to, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10661764706 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64638216433 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584558823529 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 416.7 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6543315075 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.75 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0342415012951 0.244688304435 14% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0145209721768 0.084324248473 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0227341843915 0.0667982634062 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0219928177614 0.151304729494 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00608292577448 0.056905535591 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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