Many parents believe that children should play team sports like football, basketball and so on, instead of individuals sports, such as swimming or running, during the school scheduled timetable. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?
It is thought by many parents that children should only play team sports during different schools' activities rather than individual sports. Personally, I believe that these types of sports should be played by school children because both have positive impact in their lives, and therefore, I disagree with the statement.
It is important that boys and girls should engage to team sports because it will help them develop their ability to work with others. Sports played in groups allow children to do their roles in order to achieve the common goal, which is to win against the opponents. This kind of sport also prepares them in adult life because later on when they will have jobs they need to work with other people as a team. For example, in basketball, this game teaches children to coordinate with one another on how to shoot the ball to earn points in order to win. This scenario is the same when they will be employed in a company where they need to work and discuss things with their colleagues especially when they are assigned to do a collaborative project.
The main reason why individual sports should be part of schools' timetable is that , it fosters self-discipline. This is to say that children will learn how to come on time during their training and adhere to it strictly because they know that this will help them become good and competent. This attitude, when developed by school age will have a huge impact on their overall performance in school. For instance, a recent study conducted by the Department of Education in the Philippines revealed that when they incorporated individual sports as part of a school program, there was a dramatic decrease of reported tardiness and childrens' academic performance improved.
In conclusion, while parents believe that their offsprings should engaged to team sports rather than sports played individually during schools' activities, I disagree with this idea because, in my opinion, both kinds of sports are beneficial.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04545454545 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65874072737 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515151515152 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.3629219777 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.75 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266908991521 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119462347008 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0939254781247 0.0667982634062 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215938387004 0.151304729494 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107062618599 0.056905535591 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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