Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children To what extent do you agree

Essay topics:

Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.

To what extent do you agree?

Large mass of people think that attention given to famous individuals in the media adversely affects the youngsters. I completely disagree with this position because the influence on offspring is from the family and also contents are censored. This essay will justify my position.

To begin with, one probable reason why the activities of the celebrities aired do not affect children is because, they are majorly influenced by the family as the first agent of socialization. As a result, in their cognitive stage, they pick-up behaviours, that will shape them, irrespective of what they watch. However, if the family fails, children are bound to become problems to the society. In fact, it is the parents who even teach their wards some of the negative lifestyles. To illustrate, most people who turn out with bad upbringing have attributed the problem to their parents and guardians rather than what they observe on celebrity's life. Thus whatever these young minds become is purely as a result of the way they were trained, not because of contents seen on screen.

Furthermore, though things viewed can have negative effect on the younger generation, the contents aired are censored. The censor board in most countries, ensure modesty in items on public spaces. Censorship category is based on age and other factors, such that a person less than that age sees them due to his or her predisposition to learn them, which makes it not the effect of the content. For instance, in a survey conducted by the Department of Psychology, University of Abuja, it was observed that most persons who act negatively do based on peer pressure and the few who claimed to have derived such from the media said they watched censored programs.

To conclude, I am of the opinion that although the celebrity lifestyle aired for public view can impact young people in a negative way, it is the family and exposure to illicit content by their own resolve that expose children to Ill behaviours.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 170, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... disagree with this position because the influence on offspring is from the famil...
^^
Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... the parents who even teach their wards some of the negative lifestyles. To illustrate, mos...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 653, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...n what they observe on celebritys life. Thus whatever these young minds become is pu...
^^^^
Line 5, column 20, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s seen on screen. Furthermore, though things viewed can have negative effect o...
^^
Line 5, column 319, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...han that age sees them due to his or her predisposition to learn them, which make...
^^
Line 5, column 486, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ment of Psychology, University of Abuja, it was observed that most persons who ac...
^^
Line 7, column 118, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...for public view can impact young people in a negative way, it is the family and exposure to illic...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, for instance, in fact, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1651.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98791540785 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68554741397 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583081570997 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.4473910305 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.928571429 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6428571429 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.67935871743 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187345955042 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561464522012 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467637842639 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102262609974 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321844298537 0.056905535591 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.