Many people say that family is the most powerful influence on a child’s development. However, some people suppose that other factors (such as music, friends,…) have a great influence on children. Discuss both views and give your opinions.
In contemporary society, having lots of factors that impact the development of children. Some people think that a family is a place and this place has the greatest rate influence on children, but others believe that having many other reasons such as music or friends which have a great influence on children. In my opinion, both of their family and music or friends are all influence on children.
On the one hand, some people think that family has the greatest impact on the growing up of children because parents have a part of the responsibility to teach children and they have plenty of time to expose to their children. Therefore, parents tend to teach their children via a way that they want. For example, parents will teach children about politeness. This helps children formation the politeness personality. In contrast, if parents have the wrong way, they will teach the wrong way for their children. Moreover, children tend to imitate their parents when they meet some typical activities of their parent and this also influence on children.
On the other hand, others claim that having many other factors influence children alike music or friends. To begin, children now spend space-time to listen to music or play a game because of music helps them feel relax and having a good mood. For example, if children cannot concentrate on their study, music helps them due to some kinds of music that help people concentrate on studying. In contrast, if children listen to a piece of sad music, their's mood can feel not good. Furthermore, other relationship such as friends which also impact on children. Some children have a close friend, they will influence each other's personality.
To sum up, although some people think that family has the greatest impact on children, I believe that different factors such as music or friends also influence the greatest on children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in contrast, such as, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1570.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56479186853 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.407643312102 0.561755894193 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3867826842 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.125 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1875 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332515156532 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139376142184 0.084324248473 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102213161047 0.0667982634062 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264849102992 0.151304729494 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0940902561513 0.056905535591 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.44 8.58950901804 75% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 78.4519038076 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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