In many places, people’s lifestyle is changing rapidly and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
In recent years, more and more individuals turn their attention towards the busy lifestyle when pursuing their careers and social lives, which is creating a negative effect on the connection with other members in their families. In my opinion, while this development has some influence on family relationships, the advantages of this tendency are far more beneficial.
To begin with, there are several side-effects on the family when people chase after new modern lifestyles. Unlike the old days when close relatives get together to have dinners in the evening, individuals nowadays tend to spend more time at work and skip family meals. Thus, these people distance themselves from other members. Gradually, the communication between individuals will be less frequent, which damages the family’s bond significantly. Furthermore, since people now actively desire to hang out with colleagues after work hours in order to socialize and have a boost in their careers, parents may be disappointed with the young. This could possibly lead to a domestic conflict which is an extreme factor to tear families apart.
Fortunately, the profit of new lifestyles seems to bring enormous benefits to households. Firstly, when people adapt to working the extra hours, they will have a raise in the salaries, which means individuals earn more money to spend on the families’ expense. Despite they have to sacrifice the time with their family members, they make their parents proud of their earnings in return and raise family happiness drastically. Secondly, the success of one member will encourage the others to change the way of living. In order to catch up with the young, the older will also have to be active in their social experience. Again, changing lifestyle deliver benefits to everyone in the family.
In conclusion, while the way people live is changing rapidly and affecting the relationships of families, I believe that this development has its own merits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 650, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...ay be disappointed with the young. This could possibly lead to a domestic conflict which is an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1662.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30990415335 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84190287065 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58785942492 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7544887922 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.8 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8666666667 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208764242531 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754989691181 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760795297334 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150902624544 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566351385394 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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