In many places, people’s lifestyle is changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of those developments outweigh the disadvantages?
In today's hustle and bustle society, people tend to change their lifestyle to match that of others and this trend has been proved to have an adverse effect on personal relationships with their friends and family members. Although there are some advantage benefits can be gained from changes regarding lifestyle, the cons definitely outweigh the pros for the following reasons.
On the one hand, a rapid change in a persons' lifestyle may lessen the amount of time to spend with family members. First of all, in a fiercely competitive society today, people have been trying to stay at late in the workplace, since they can strive to be an efficient worker by putting in extra hours at work. For example, In Japan, the Japanese not only work in legal time, almost of them will not leave work at 5.PM but they will continue to work until 7 or 8 P. M or later. Therefore, they hardly any time is left for family members to bond over a meal or a family trip.
Secondly, with the technology boom, many residents have been applying technology in every aspect of life such as interaction and communication between family members. As people adopt a lifestyle to fit the pace of modern life, they tend to utilize means possible to make interactions quicker and more efficient, namely email, fax, text messages, social media, so on. Consequently, the needs to talk to other people in person is minimized in our everyday life and this contrast with the basis of family interaction and communication. Because that are stemmed from face-to-face conversations which is the optimal means of getting to know one another, bonding with each other, and conveying our emotions.
In conclusion, although a change in lifestyle is sometimes necessary in some cases to boost efficiency in the workplace or modern society in general, people should refrain from constantly changing their's lifestyle as family relationships may suffer due to this trend.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 38, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... On the one hand, a rapid change in a persons lifestyle may lessen the amount of time...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in general, such as, first of all, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96913580247 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72194226046 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595679012346 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.1729219373 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.166666667 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.9166666667 7.06120827912 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210533238161 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073429946708 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638532686343 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139803699412 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539464346987 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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