In many places, people’s lifestyle is changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of those developments outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that connections in families have been affected by the quick changes in inhabitants' ways of life in many regions. Despite some obvious disadvantages of this trend, I would argue that these are outweighed by the advantages.
On one hand, there are two major drawbacks when there is an impact on family ties due to the rapid changes in people's lifestyles. Firstly, children and their parents seem to be less close nowadays since both parents have to work full time to support the family. This is also due to the development in technology and workers need to keep learning every day and improving their skills for better job opportunities. As a result, many families no longer eat meals together or leave far away and have less contact with their relatives than before. Take Christmas Day, for example, it might be one of those rare days when the family gets together and talk after a whole year. Secondly, some newlyweds still like surfing the net and adopt different ways of thinking while they do not have much time for each other, causing unnecessary misunderstandings and even divorce after a short time stay under the same roof.
On the other hand, I believe that the benefits are more significant than such disadvantages. One reason for this view is that it reduces the pressure on women who live in a traditional society that they have to give birth after a short time being married. Furthermore, thanks to the advances in online communication, people who living far away can easily keep in touch with family and friends through frequent voice and video calls. Another reason is that fast food consumption allows those who are in a more industrious lifestyle to cope with the fast pace of modern life. It also cut down the amount of time and effort for women who have multitasked workloads such as writing a report, presiding over the meeting, nurturing their kids, etc.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the advantages of this lifestyle's constant changing to family bonds are more significant than the disadvantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: fulltime
...owadays since both parents have to work full time to support the family. This is also due...
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Suggestion:
... the meeting, nurturing their kids, etc. In conclusion, it seems to me that the a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8591954023 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70286537572 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594827586207 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7811836286 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.785714286 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8571428571 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213098773557 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682733097698 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577508670277 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145966422138 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574855561866 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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