Many students take part-time jobs while studying in university. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Many students take part-time jobs while studying in university. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

In the recent years, it has been regarded as a trendy phenomenon that many students take advantage of redundant time in the university to get involved in working environment as a half-day labor. From my personal perspective, I believe its benefits exceeds its detriment and several reasons will be put up with to prove my opinion in the following paragraphs.

First of all, the negative upshot can be elucidated when many university students are in search of part-time occupation. More specifically, when they make a decision to seek a job as part-time, it is necessary to take time allocation for studying at university and working out there into consideration. If college students squander a plethora of time for their own job, academic performance can be partly or even totally exacerbated. In the long run, it is more likely that students are expelled from school or drop out of school because of their bad result of the schooling.

However, the advantages a part-time work yields surpass excessively the disadvantages it does. Firstly, having a meaningful and oriented job in the free time, students will get a thorough preparation for an official or full-time occupation after graduation. They seize the opportunities to apply theoretical knowledge which is gradually accumulated at university into the practical cases. Moreover, engaging in the professional working environment at a very young age can be a priceless chance to be familiar with the work style and the workload in the office. Therefore, it probably comes as no surprise when after having graduated, students officially kick their career off.

In conclusion, when it comes to a part-time work during university period, I totally concur that the positive side outweighs the negative one because the resultant contributions it makes to students' career.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 42, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'yield'?
Suggestion: yield
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1541.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27739726027 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10634939263 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578767123288 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8188419797 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.416666667 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28687771064 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106812470257 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821599381911 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164054067826 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529136046591 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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