money spend on apparel on the Internet

Essay topics:

money spend on apparel on the Internet

The graph compares the money spend on apparel on the Internet in USA and Japan between 1999 and 2003. It is clearly seen that at first year Japanese buyers spend much money than USA people on the Internet. As the years went by the spending habits of the two countries became almost identical.
In 1999, USA people spend on apparel was stood 5 dollars, and it doubled at the same time in Japan. In the following years, the expenditure of money spending on cloth in both Japan and USA increased slightly to 12 and 10 million dollars respectively.
The only year when expenses plunged into both countries was 2001 when the USA spent 8 and Japan reached the lowest point at 7 million dollars.
In the two following years, there was a significant increase in sales of clothes in both countries. In 2002, the USA and Japan spent almost 19 million and in 2003, they reached the highest amount.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... money than USA people on the Internet. As the years went by the spending habits o...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...2003, they reached the highest amount.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 4.0 24.0651302605 17% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 735.0 1615.20841683 46% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 159.0 315.596192385 50% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62264150943 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 4.20363070211 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38599476234 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 176.041082164 51% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559748427673 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 209.7 506.74238477 41% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 21.6967739537 49.4020404114 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.875 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.125 7.06120827912 16% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286350754648 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144463939433 0.084324248473 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154173452799 0.0667982634062 231% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170124643762 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.188506863616 0.056905535591 331% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 50.2224549098 154% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 78.4519038076 40% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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